A rare foray back into the world of Friday Fictioneers for this post,
THE CHALLENGE:
Write a one hundred word story that has a beginning, middle and end. (No one will be ostracized for going a few words over the count.)THE KEY:MAKE. EVERY. WORD. COUNT.
Famous (100 Words)
Harris surveyed the carnage with quiet satisfaction. Blood flowed freely from his shattered nose yet he felt no pain. Ears ringing and hands shaking he sought his companion.
Klebold crouched, peering under a desk at three terrified girls. “Boo,” he shouted gleefully, putting a bullet in each of them.
“Reckon we’re about done,” said Harris.
Klebold nodded laughing, “you look like shit, man.”
At the far side of the library, they stopped, face to face, a gun to each other’s head.
“Right then, on three,” said Harris.
“On three,” Klebold agreed.
“One.., two..,” Harris paused smiling, “we’re fucking famous man!”
jwdwrites 
Hi there — I couldn’t read the post without copying and pasting into Wordpad?
Such painful memories in this story – I don’t think we’ll ever forget Columbine. An interesting response to the prompt —-
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Hi, thanks for taking the trouble to read and comment, I have fixed the glitch now, but I don’t know what caused it.
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I’m only seeing a column inch of your submission. Or maybe I’ve got a detached retina. Either way, I’ll pop back later.
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Hi Sandra, thanks for letting me know, I don’t know what happened there, I will fix it when I get home. ☺
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Hi Sandra, have fixed the glitch now 🙂
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Very dark and chilling. And of course, true to life. I could feel the boys’ gleeful psychosis leaping out at me.
I should mention that I got the entire story in my email (I can only see the one column on here as well).
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Hi Ali, thanks for the comment, I have fixed the glitch now 🙂
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What a story.. and yet.. that brings back the memories of Breivik for a Scandinavian guy… good to be able to come in late and be able to read it all.
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Thanks Bjorn 🙂
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Chilling. So tragic that events such as this aren’t just fiction. You capture the craziness of these two very convincingly.
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Hello Margaret, thank you for reading and taking the trouble to comment, I was a bit concerned that I might upset some people by taking a real life event and writing a story based on what happened (although no-one really knows what really went on in their final minutes)but for some reason the prompt just pushed me in that direction. I am glad you found it convincing and grateful for your kind words. 🙂
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Jwd, Tragic occurance we’ll never forget. You made it real with this piece. Terrible those guys chose to be famous at the horrible expense of all those lives. — Susan
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Thanks Suzanne, I appreciate your comments. 🙂
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Dear JWD,
The absence of conscience is horrifying. Such is the mind of a narcissist. Being famous was the only goal. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle, of course my story is pure supposition as to their final words together, but I can’t see anyone complaining that I have somehow portrayed these disgusting individuals in an unfair light.
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Dear JWD,
Killer story. No, really, very well done. You captured the mindless nature of the two miscreants very well. Good riddance to bad rubbish.
Aloha,
Doug
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Hear hear! Doug you are far too generous but I am grateful and encouraged by your very kind feedback. Thank you 🙂
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