Photo copyright – J Hardy Carroll
Charcoal and water shone black in the moonlight as Bateman picked his way through the charred ruins of the house, the old man’s warning echoing in his head – Ignis Avem!
“This is where the fire started.” The fireman said, pointing to a scorch-mark on what used to be the conservatory floor. “Did you have underfloor heating sir?”
Bateman nodded absently, stunned by the devastation.
Ignis Avem! The old man had shouted, as he’d stolen the egg from the nest, deep in the volcano caldera.
High above them, the shrill cry of the Phoenix carried on the air.
Cool, that last line.
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Thank you 😊
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There’s a reason the Phoenix is birthed within a volcano, far away from combustibles…
Nice one!
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The phoenix rises for revenge. Great stuff.
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Not the ending I expected! Excellent.
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Thank you very much 😊
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Powerful stuff!
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Thanks Sandra! 😊
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Great story! (I had to look up the Latin.)
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Thank you Susan 😊
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Another masterpiece James!
Keep them coming!
Waiting for your books!
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Thank you Ingvild you really are making me blush! 😊
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What happens when you take something that doesn’t belong to you.
Apparently, this is a reference to a book by Christopher Mancini.
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That is a brilliant take.
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Thank you very much! 😊
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Ummm….What’s in the nest should stay in the nest. Hard lesson to learn. Like your take on the photo!
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Thank you 😊
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He should have gotten a translator.
Brilliant!
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Thank you for reading and for your kind comments 😊
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Yeah, you really don’t want to mess those fire birds 🙂
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That really is a different take on the prompt. Nice one. Nicely written, too, using sound as well as sight to describe the scene. The dialogue is very believable and fluent. The man’s mental state is shown clearly. The structure and pace are good. Like it!
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Thank you so much for the feedback, it was very kind of you to give me such a detailed critique and I very much appreciate it. 😊
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Wonderful imagery.
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Thank you very much! 😊
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