This week’s picture made me think of all the homeless people I seem to see when I use one of these underpasses. What a sad irony that these lost souls are often referred to as an underclass. Friday Fictioneers is a group of writers that come together to create whatever comes to mind from the weekly photoprompt chosen by Rochelle Wisoff-fields. The challenge is to create a story with a beginning, a middle and an end while keeping within the wordcount of 100 words! Click on the blue frog for other people’s stories. 🙂
Picture copyright – Stephen Baum
Lost & Found – (100 words)
Moving warily down the ramp, Matt’s heart hammered as the sound of human laughter boomed deep and menacing from the gaping concrete mouth.
He flinched as two youths on bicycles burst out of the darkness and swept narrowly past, legs pumping rapidly, frames swinging back and forth in synchronous competition.
Anxiously, he plunged into the gloom where a silhouetted figure sat slumped against one wall. The acrid stench of ammonia assaulted his nostrils as he drew closer.
“Spare some change, mate?” The man slurred absently.
Angry and repulsed but ultimately relieved, Matt composed himself.
“Come on Dad, let’s go home.”
Excellent story, it’s amazing what can be done with just 100 words and how charged emotions can be.
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Hi Marshall, thank you for reading and your very kind words 🙂
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Wonder what happened at home that the dad made such an extreme decision. Or had he been missing for ages and finally found? 🙂 Interesting take on the photo. Well written!
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Thank you Vinay 🙂
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Poignant, and well written. A slice of life.
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Thank you 🙂
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Gosh! I didn’t see the ending coming. That really got me like all great stories do. Straight from the heart to the heart!
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That is very kind of you 🙂
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Nice that he found his dad, I hope he can help him.
I loved the description of the cycling boys!
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So many times I have been almost bowled over by cyclists coming out of an underpass. 🙂
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Oh goodness, what a great vignette. And good to find a different take on the prompt.
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Thank you for your very kind comments 🙂
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So embarrassing: don’t you just hate it when you find your Dad begging again?
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I am used to it now, ha ha! 🙂
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These cycling boys were amazing, as was the whole atmosphere. It’s admirable skill to manag that in so few words. I’m glad about the positive ending, too.
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Thank you so much for your very kind words 🙂
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Oh I love this.. The surprise of the father at the end definitely changed the whole meaning of the story.
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You took me by surprise there. Nicely done.
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Quality stuff – well done. Great description of the bikes. Fantastic understated last line.
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