Welcome to this week’s Friday Fictioneers! For those that don’t already know, Friday Fictioneers is a group of bloggers from around the world who create a story in 100 words from a photo prompt posted by our host, Rochelle Wissoff-Fields each Wednesday. My contribution is posted below the photo prompt, as always comments are most welcome, good or bad (constructive please!) and will ensure a reciprocal visit. I hope you enjoy!
Copyright – Sandra Crook
The Traveller (100 Words)
“What kinda bike is that?” said the wide-eyed teenager. The traveller smiled, popping the kickstand.
“One like you’ve never seen before.” he replied, entering the shop. When he returned the youth was still admiring.
“Can I sit on her?” begged the youth.
“Knock yourself out.”
The boy mounted, his face a mask of joy. “Wanna start her up?” the traveller indulged.
“Boy do I!”
“Okay, press that button there, but don’t touch the…”
Motorcycle and boy tore away amidst a fiery glow. A blinding flash, a sonic boom, and they vanished into whenever.
“…Red button.” finished the traveller.
jwdwrites 
Oops. Clever story, JWD. A time machine?
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Yes! I haven’t read the others yet so I am not sure how many time machines there will be! Thanks for the speedy visit! 🙂
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You’re safe this week, jwd. Even though you’re stalking me by always posting right after mine, I don’t have a time machine. Your story, besides being humorous, flowed very smoothly and believably (except for the time machine part, of course.) Those red buttons are simply irresistible!!
janet
Your shameless attempt at getting comments did NOT go unnoticed, BTW!! 🙂
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🙂
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Good to hear from you Janet, I was worried I’d offended you, so I was trying to test the water. Thank you for your kind comments. 🙂
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Yeah well… you should always wait for the end of the tutorial. Nice one!
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That was very, very visual! I can imagine him standing there,saying that last word, dust settling around him!
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There, rescued from my spam filter! Thanks for the kind words Managua. 🙂
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Hahaha … Love that 😀
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Hey we did similar takes, I think I like yours better though, more mysterious! Well done! 🙂
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cute story. Sorry about the dyslexic rider…
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? 🙂
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Haha… love it…!
Love the crescendo, and then the fall… Perfect..
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Thanks Carolyn, you wouldn’t believe the problems I have had trying to comment on your story and to reply to your comment. For some reason every time I try (eight times now, this is the ninth) my internet connection bombs out when I try to post. Here goes…
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ok..so he wasn’t dyslexic – just impulsive.
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He was indeed. Although, he could be dyslexic, I just never asked. 🙂
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Oh my, that was perfect. Ending just exactly as it should… “Red button.” 😀
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Thanks Lyn. 🙂
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Haha this was funny 🙂 i’m glad what I read surpassed my anticipation and expectations. Wonderful piece, truly looking forward to the next one.
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Thank you Camgal, that is so nice of you to say. 🙂
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JWD how that last line clinched the story. Really enjoyed – thanks.
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Thanks Jenny, I am glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
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Your story is a lot of fun. I like that you described them as vanishing into whenever for the time machine nod. Careful of that red button!
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Why can’t we leave those darned red buttons alone? 🙂
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Because we can’t live with the thought of not pushing it and never finding out what it does!
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So true. 🙂
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Where did they go? a nice one and apt for the photo
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Thanks Padmini. 🙂
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Awesome. You wrote that last part perfectly. That guy is pretty trusting of kids to let him near it.
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Thank you very much David, he was a bit careless wasn’t he?
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I think you dropped that last line in perfectly, it’s great pacing. I’d briefly considered time machine, because it looks so much like the one in the movie ( to me, anyway), but you’ve done such a great job, I’m glad I didn’t go with it. 🙂
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Trudy you are too kind, but thank you very much. You kind comments are much appreciated.
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Yep, we’ve all been there!
Excellent piece of writing.
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Thanks Elephant. 🙂
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What a creative interpretation of the photo! I can really see the time-travel aspect now that I look at in, which I didn’t see at all before reading your story. Nice work!
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Your comments are greatly appreciated, but how should I address you? kdillmanjones is quite long and a little formal sounding. 🙂
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Fabulous! Best so far. I loved the set up and the ending – very very cleverly done 🙂
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Hey thanks El, coming from you that’s fine praise indeed. 🙂
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Perhaps he will cross paths with Marty McFly in the Delorean somewhere. I thought it might be the Ghost Rider, but I am leaning more toward time travel.
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Hi Joe, definitely time travel for mine. Nice to hear from you. 🙂
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Why do they put those red buttons in such easy places?
Poof!
Fun read…but leaves you wondering just where did jr. end up?
Thanks for your visit.
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It’s a mystery Jules. 🙂
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Haha! Good one. It always comes down to the bloody red button, doesn’t it?
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Yep, when all else fails there’s always the red button!
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Well played sir.
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Thanks. 🙂
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It’s like no one reads the instructions anymore? 😉
Good one!
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😆 A good fun story. Hope the boy figures out how to get back.
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Thanks Kim. 🙂
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Well, that’s just cute.
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Thank you Shirley. 🙂
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When you look at the picture it just screams a time machine doesn’t it? I thought that at first, but mine changed a bit during the writing and editing. Well done!
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Thank you Jackie. 🙂
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oh. uh-oh ^^ this was wonderfully done, like a scene from a movie.. wonder what happened to the kid ^^
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Who knows, he may pop up! Thanks for your kind comments:)
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Bet he winds up fighting the Morlocks! Well done story.
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Thanks Perry, I remember those guys from the film, they gave me nightmares when I was a kid. 🙂
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Well done, very enjoyable and the writing flowed so well
Dee
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Thank you Dee. 🙂
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Did the kid look a little like Michael J. Fox? Wonder how many generations will pass before he returns? Enjoyed this. Loved the pause at the end … then zapping us with ..”red button.” Nice work. Tks for visiting my Dumb Rednecks.
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Good One!
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Cheers!
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I enjoyed this story and a couple of others I read after coming to your site. Thanks for visiting mine and the like of my Weekly Photo Challenge post representing Change.
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You are most welcome, and thank you for the visit and the kind words. I was in a bit of a hurry looking through earlier but I will pop back and look in more depth when I have more time. 🙂
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““Knock yourself out.” Appropriate prelude to the ending which sounds like the ultimate “knock yourself out” experience. Good tale well told..
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Thanks vb, your kind comments are much appreciated. 🙂
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